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Vane's avatar

Very enjoyable!

Paul's avatar

Thank you!

Vane's avatar

To elaborate, I liked the way you kept the mystery going. That’s how you keep the reader reading. Even when I was tired I kept on. Just woke up to say that ☺️

Paul's avatar

Thanks for that, really appreciate the feedback. Hope you can get some rest :)

Lin Robinson's avatar

You got me with the opening - I've felt just that way when I've had to drive a loaner car.

Interesting concept. I think we were in Kansas when Larry and I noticed the conjunction of bible verses, giant crosses, and steamy billboards. Keep up the good work. (Ditch the cockroaches, thought - uhh, hate those things.)

Paul's avatar

Thank you for the encouragement! I’ll let you know when the next one drops. Unfortunately, the cockroaches have a return engagement in later stories.

Karen Tennant's avatar

Oh, and I really liked how you tied it to an actual experience of yours.

Karen Tennant's avatar

I couldn't stop reading until it ended! Great story, good ending too. Makes me wonder if he deserved what happened to him.....

Paul's avatar

Thanks for reading, I really appreciate it!